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geschrieben am: 11.06.2004 um 13:19 Uhr
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Soo.. ich muss für Englisch eine INHALTSANGABE von einem Kapitel aus Harry Potter 3 schreiben. Meine Note hängt davon ab un da ich mir zeimlich unsicher bin wärs nett wenn ein Englisch Profi von euch sich das ma durchlesen könnt un die Fehler berichtigen könnt.. is nur ziemlich viel.. wenns trotzdem wer macht.. DANKE !
After it was admits that Sirius Black was in the castle, the teachers need to conduct a thorough search of the castle. Professor Dumbledore send all the students to the Great Hall and there they must sleep. Percy watches out the students. Ron, Hermione and Harry talk about Sirius. They ask themselves how it was possible for him to be broken in. At night the teachers have no sign for him. The school talks about nothing but Sirius Black for the next few days. The fat Lady`s ripped canvas had been taken off the wall and replaced with the portrait of Sir Cadogan. Harry is now closely watched. Professor McGonagall tells him that Sirius is behind him, but he knows it already, because he heard a discussion between Rons parents.
So that nothing happens to him, now also a teacher watches out for him, if he plays Quidditch. Their first play is on Saturday, against Slytherin. But it comes completely different. Slytherin can not play, their excuse is, that their Seeker`s arm`s still injured. They must play against Hufflepuff. Now they must find a new strategy. Their captain, Oliver Wood says that they must also take that play seriously. The day before the match, Harry, Hermione and Ron have Vertretung (?!) at “Defence against the Dark Arts”. Snape takes over this task. Snape is as always unfair to them and discusses a topic that they did not make ever. Ron criticizes the way he teaches a class and receives a punishing work for it.
On the day of the match, Harry wakes up early. So early, that it is still dark. Outside he hears thunderstorms and it rains very strongly. Additional the wind outside is very strong, like a storm.
The play begins.
Harry can hardly see something because of the storm and the rain. In air, he freezes.
The other one is not differently, therefore they take themselves a time-out. Oliver Wood says to Harry, that he has to catch the Snitch.
It continues.
After short time Harry and Diggory, the Seeker of Hufflepuff discover
the Snitch. Harry flies fast to the Snitch but suddenly he sees over one
hundred Dementors, their hidden faces pointing up at him, standing below.
He hears a voice inside his head. The voice cries: “ Not Harry please not Harry. Stand aside, you silly girl. Not Harry please no, take me, kill me instead. Have mercy. “
Harry wakes up in the hospital wing. The Gryffindor Quidditch team stand around his bed. They look at him. They lost the match. They say that they thought he was dead, because he fells off. Suddenly Harry remembers. Hermione tells Harry, that Dumbledore was very angry as Harry felled off. He ran on the playing field and magicked him onto a stretcher. Then he walked up to school, with him floating on it.
Harry asks for his broomstick. Unfortunately Ron and Hermione must tell him, that his broomstick is broken.
They show Harry the only remains of his broomstick.
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geschrieben am: 11.06.2004 um 15:25 Uhr
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(zitat)Soo.. ich muss für Englisch eine INHALTSANGABE von einem Kapitel aus Harry Potter 3 schreiben. Meine Note hängt davon ab un da ich mir zeimlich unsicher bin wärs nett wenn ein Englisch Profi von euch sich das ma durchlesen könnt un die Fehler berichtigen könnt.. is nur ziemlich viel.. wenns trotzdem wer macht.. DANKE !
After it was admits that Sirius Black was in the castle, the teachers need to conduct a thorough search of the castle. Professor Dumbledore send all the students to the Great Hall and there they must sleep. [b]Percy looked after the students.[/b] Ron, Hermione and Harry talk about Sirius. They ask themselves how it was possible for him to be broken in. At night the teachers have no sign for him. The school talks about nothing but Sirius Black for the next few days. The fat Lady`s ripped canvas had been taken off the wall and replaced with the portrait of Sir Cadogan. Harry is now closely watched. Professor McGonagall tells him that Sirius is behind him, but he knows it already, because he heard a discussion between Rons parents.
So that nothing happens to him, now also a teacher watches out for him, if he plays Quidditch. Their first play is on Saturday, against Slytherin. But it comes completely different. Slytherin can not play, their excuse is, that their Seeker`s arm`s still injured. They must play against Hufflepuff. Now they must find a new strategy. Their captain, Oliver Wood says that they must also take that play seriously. The day before the match, Harry, Hermione and Ron have Vertretung (?!) at “Defence against the Dark Arts”. Snape takes over this task. Snape is as always [b]not fair[/b] to them and discusses a topic that they did not make ever. Ron criticizes the way he teaches a class and receives a punishing work for it.
On the day of the match, Harry wakes up early. So early, that it is still dark. Outside he hears thunderstorms and it rains very strongly. Additional the wind outside is very strong, like a storm.
The play begins.
Harry can hardly see something because of the storm and the rain. In air, he freezes.
The other one is not differently, therefore they take themselves a time-out. Oliver Wood says to Harry, that he has to catch the Snitch.
It continues.
After short time Harry and Diggory, the Seeker of Hufflepuff discover
the Snitch. Harry flies fast to the Snitch but suddenly he sees over one
hundred Dementors, their hidden faces pointing up at him, standing below.
He hears a voice inside his head. The voice cries: “ Not Harry please not Harry. Stand aside, you silly girl. Not Harry please no, take me, kill me instead. Have mercy. “
Harry wakes up in the hospital wing. The Gryffindor Quidditch team stand around his bed. They look at him. They lost the match. They say that they thought he was dead, because he fells off. Suddenly Harry remembers. Hermione tells Harry, that Dumbledore was very angry as Harry felled off. He ran on the playing field and magicked him onto a stretcher. Then he walked up to school, with him floating on it.
Harry asks for his broomstick. Unfortunately Ron and Hermione must tell him, that his broomstick is broken.
They show Harry the only remains of his broomstick.
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Ist doch recht gut geschrieben. Sind nur Einzelheiten, die ich noch verändern würde. Hört sich besser an. Und, du hast ziemlich oft "must" geschrieben, ich würde es durch "have to" ersetzen, hört sich besser an.
Geändert am 11.06.2004 um 15:26 Uhr von inasc |
| Wer glaubt, ein Christ zu sein, weil er die Kirche besucht, irrt sich. Man wird ja auch kein Auto, wenn man in eine Garage geht. |
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geschrieben am: 12.06.2004 um 10:40 Uhr
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Dankeschön, dass is ja lieb von dir. Ich hab nur noch eine Frage, darf ich das mit der direkten Rede in einer Inhaltsangabe so schreiben??
He hears a voice inside his head. The voice cries: “ Not Harry please not Harry. Stand aside, you silly girl. Not Harry please no, take me, kill me instead. Have mercy. “
Das mein ich.. Nur ich weiß eigentlich ich darf keine direkte Rede schreiben, aber hab Gedacht sowas is vielleicht ne Ausnahme, weil in der indirekten Rede kann mans au nit schreiben oda???!!! |
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geschrieben am: 12.06.2004 um 11:31 Uhr
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Ich glaube, dass man in einer Inhaltsangabe, keine wörtliche rede sondern nur Indirekte Rede verwenden darf! |
„Das Denken ist zwar allen Menschen erlaubt, aber vielen bleibt es erspart.”
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geschrieben am: 12.06.2004 um 11:36 Uhr
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[i][schwarz]vereinzelt darf man das, glaub ich... wenn es nicht anders geht, wie in diesem fall. man kann ja schlecht das, was die stimme inside is head zu ihm cries, anders schreiben ^^ 
Geändert am 12.06.2004 um 11:59 Uhr von Alykh |
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geschrieben am: 12.06.2004 um 11:55 Uhr
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Harry heard his mothers voice in his mind, she entreating Voldemort taking her life instead of Harry's. She begs him to spares Harry's life!
So würde es -glaube ich- auch gehen!
Geändert am 12.06.2004 um 11:58 Uhr von LaDy-SilVeR |
„Das Denken ist zwar allen Menschen erlaubt, aber vielen bleibt es erspart.”
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geschrieben am: 12.06.2004 um 23:45 Uhr
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ok...ich hab grad anglisch-abi mit ner glatten 1 gemacht...also werd ich meine künste mal weitergeben...
das is ja nich auszuhalten ....tz...
(zitat)After it had been admitted that Sirius Black had entered the castle, the teachers had to conduct a thorough search of the castle. The headmaster, Professor Dumbledore sends all the students into the Great Hall where they have to sleep. Percy Weasley looks after them. Ron, Hermione and Harry talk about Sirius Black. They wonder how it had been possible for him to get into the castle. Deep in the night the teachers still don't have any sign of him. The whole school talks about nothing but Sirius Black for the next few days. The fat Lady`s ripped canvas had been taken off the wall and had been replaced by the portrait of Sir Cadogan. Harry is now watched closely. Professor McGonagall tells him that Sirius is behind him but he already knows it because he had listened to a discussion between Ron's parents.
However, now also a teacher watches out for Harry when he plays Quidditch so that nothing happens to him. Their first match is on a Saturday, against Slytherin. But this match doesn't take place because the Slytherins say that they can not play. Their excuse is that their Seeker`s arm is still injured. So they have to play against Hufflepuff. But now they have to find a new strategy because this match is very important for the team. The day before the match their teacher at “Defence against the Dark Arts” is ill and so Professor Snape takes over this task. Snape is as unfair to them as he always is and takes a topic the kids hadn't ever had before. Ron criticizes the way he teaches a class and receives a punishing work for it.
On the day of the match, Harry wakes up early in the morning. So early, that it is still dark. Outside he hears a thunderstorm and it is raining very heavily. Additionally the wind outside is very strong, almost like a storm.
The match begins.
Harry can hardly see anything because of the storm and the rain. In the air he freezes.
The other members of the team don't feel better, therefore they take a time-out. Oliver Wood says to Harry that he has to catch the Snitch and so the match continues.
After a short time Harry and Cedric Diggory, the Seeker of the Hufflepuff team, discover
the Snitch. Harry flies fast to the Snitch but suddenly he sees over one hundred Dementors, their hidden faces pointing up at him, standing below.
He hears a horrible voice inside his head. (The voice cries: “ Not Harry please not Harry. Stand aside, you silly girl. Not Harry please no, take me, kill me instead. Have mercy. “[blau]würd ich weglassen, da wörtliche rede verboten ist)[/blau]He loses consciousness.
Harry wakes up in the hospital wing. The Gryffindor Quidditch team stands around his bed and looks at him. They had lost the match. The boys say that they had thought Harry is dead, because he had fallen off. Suddenly Harry remembers. Hermione tells Harry that Dumbledore had been very angry as Harry fell off.
Harry asks for his broomstick. Unfortunately Ron and Hermione have tell him that his broomstick is broken.
So they show Harry the remains of it.
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geschrieben am: 13.06.2004 um 13:25 Uhr
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Danke Danke Danke peee  Und allen anderen natürlich auch danke!!!!!!!
aber eine frage.. warum muss man denn im ersten satz nich simple present schreiben?!
"the teachers had to conduct a thorough search of the castle"
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geschrieben am: 13.06.2004 um 14:06 Uhr
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| [i]Naja...sooo genau sollte man eine INhaltsangabe auch nicht schreiben..lieber die wichtigsten Dinge raussuchen und dann zusammenfassen.. |
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geschrieben am: 13.06.2004 um 14:16 Uhr
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(zitat)After it had been proved that Sirius Black had entered Hogwarts, the teachers dispose a search in all parts of the castle.(/zitat)nimms mal so...is denk ich doch besser...
simple present geht in diesem falle am anfang des satzes nicht, da der satz mit "after..." beginnt und somit etwas in der vergangenheit darstellt. übersetzt heißt es ja auch: Nachdem es bewiesen war, dass sirius black hogwarts betreten hatte, veranlassen die lehrer eine durchsuchung in allen teilen des schlosses.
oh gott ich hasse zeitformen
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geschrieben am: 13.06.2004 um 19:34 Uhr
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Danke, auch nochma für die Erklärung !!!
Hoffe das klappt.. morgen muss ich die abgeben un Dienstag dann noch frei vortragen  naja.... wird schon klappen, danke deina hilfe 
danke |
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